I gaze at the horizon, the orange ball drowning in the blue.
The gulls on their flight,
Off to their nest, back to their love.
The ships sail off to their destination,
With aspirations and desires in the passengers.
Like brown blog they float and dissolve slowly at the fine blue line.
I stand there like a marble statue,
Engraved with the wait of your return.
Months have passed by you sailed in the blue.
Leaving me behind on the stony shore.
My feet have paralyzed,
My heart is growing stone old.
With every sail passing by I long to see you.
But gone are you so far from me, my love.
My hands are so meek to reach out for you.
Red satin wavering in the salty breeze,
Oozing out from my cut wounds.
The depth of which is growing with time like a gangrene,
A hole growing in my heart.
The salty breeze precipitates salt on my cheeks,
But, it mingles well with my lingering pain.
The pain of your ignorance,
I tried to stop, I begged but you were gone.
Sailed off from the shore of my heart, in to the misty morose of the blue.
Here I am standing still there like a women who can’t be moved,
Stone-cold to her inner core.
The breeze is still the same, the soothing lash.
In its moistly tamed touch which lingers to my cheek,
Accompanying the salty tears of mine.
Flowing in unity down the time rugged open wounds of mine.
I am still in wait for you,
Though my eyes seems to give up as it dint lash even once.
Since time you kissed them last.
My lips have dried, in the thirst of you touch.
Here I stand alone awaiting for you to return.
Dock back to the shores of my heart.
Until the blue keeps spattering me,
With the droplets of time filled memories of ours.
Giving me hopes to survive until you return.
Total words:327; FCA
Also shared with Romantic Friday Writers under the theme "Heart Stopper".


excellent imagery...!
ReplyDeleteLoved every line of it...pain of waiting is definitely the worst pain ever
"Red satin wavering in the salty breeze" nice
ReplyDelete@tarunima. you are always humble one to comment such good lines for my poems.:)
ReplyDelete@zongrik. thank you that you caught the line so well.:)
A wonderful poem and excellent use of the prop.
ReplyDeleteMy entry for week 9: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/31/dearest-john-2/
fabulous,
ReplyDeleteperfect words with stunning image.
A love letter to the long-awaited. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteWhen you wait and wait, with hope and expectation, but to no avail - what heartbreak! Beautifully done. I truly liked it. Here's my silly attempts: http://terri0729.wordpress.com/2011/08/31/what/
ReplyDeletehttp://terri0729.wordpress.com/2011/08/31/the-exclamation-point/ Hope you have a great day!
@charlesmashburn. thank you so much and ya it instantly hit with these sad lines when i saw the picture(prop). :)
ReplyDelete@morning. thank you. :)
@kay. thank you and yes its a letter i even wanted to convey to someone but its simply so hard on his mind that it no more seems to move to its tenderness looking at my sorrows anymore. :/
@terri. thank you dear and no one's attempts are silly, i am sure you too must have written amazing poetry. :)
Evocative poem, nice write!
ReplyDeletemagical waiting piece.
ReplyDeletewow.
I was caught up in your words as they transported me both in emotion and imagery. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteJP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/09/01/ive-got-you/
A sad tale. Who would dare make love wait? Thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteYou are writing beautifully Life. Gorgeous picture. Fantastic prop for your poem.
ReplyDeleteD
Have tweeted it...
this gives off such a sad vibe.
ReplyDeletevaguely reminds me of mine... =P
heartbreak is but an inconvenience,
and i suppose we just have to
learn to live with it.
difficult but not impossible.
=)
Hi,
ReplyDeleteAh, the agony of separation!
Beautifully written, the concept of loss magnified by vast expanse of ocean. ;)
best
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Gorgeous imagery...beutifully written, great choice of the words...simply a brilliant one...
ReplyDeleteexcellent way of expression.....:D
ReplyDeleteloved the flow in it.......
You are very good at painting pictures with words. Well written.
ReplyDeleteThis had such a lovely flow to it and beautiful imagery - a complete joy to read!
ReplyDeleteLx
Thanks all of you for appreciating my poem. i am deeply touched, :)
ReplyDeleteand special thanks to L'Aussie thanks dear for tweeting my poem. :):*
and to sweetpea. yes heart break is so inconvenient and as you said its something we have to live with how much ever it hurts. i really wish for the boy whom i have started blogging reads my poems and understand how much i loved him.:/
Such a lovely poem and so full of pain and hope.
ReplyDeletehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/05/the-milky-seas/
I love the ending - "Giving me hopes to survive until you return". This is a scene that could apply to many who are left to wait for the return of a loved one. Well done ...!!!
ReplyDeleteCheck out my little twist on the prompt -
http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2011/09/02/sailing-into-the-midnight-sky/
My heart is growing stone old. - wonderful line.
ReplyDeleteI wasn't quite sure what the "brown blog" was, perhaps you might substitute some other phrase there...? The only one that came to mind was the way that ships dump their latrines out at sea, and I don't think that's where you want people to go in their minds.
The whole poem is lovely, carrying a beautiful sense of loss and longing.
Hello Life.
ReplyDeleteThank you for such a warm welcome back. I must admit that I have missed the interaction with my friends, readers & followers while I was away on vacation.
This piece of yours is breathtakingly beautiful. Your image is spot on. I can feel the depth of emotion, your longing and waiting in vain.
These are my favorite lines: "Red satin wavering in the salty breeze,
Oozing out from my cut wounds.
The depth of which is growing with time like a gangrene,
A hole growing in my heart."
Awesome writing! Keep it up.
Under Blinking Stars
Sad and haunting note in your poetry.
ReplyDeleteThe waiting is despairing her...can she still survive his long absence or will he remember her still?
Thanks for the visit in my blog ~
Wonderful and heart-wrenching! Well done :-)
ReplyDeleteThe pain of your ignorance. beautiful.
ReplyDeleteHitesh